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src/4locations/0title.txt

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 ## Locations
 
-Each location below contains a description, and a list of encounters. Each time you enter a location, roll a six sided die. Count that many items down the list (skipping any crossed out items) and resolve that encounter. Then cross it off the list. Each individual location on the map can have a different encounter every time you return to it. For trivial items or additional atmosphere, see [Trinkets and Atmosphere].
+Each location below contains a description, and a list of encounters. Each time you enter a location, roll 1d6. Count that many items down the list (skipping any crossed out items) and resolve that encounter. Then cross it off the list. Each individual location on the map can have a different encounter every time you return to it. For trivial items or additional atmosphere, see [Trinkets and Atmosphere].
 
 Permenant features: When you encounter a *permenant feature*, add that feature to the map with a marking of your choice, and then check it off the list of encounters. The feature will always be there when you return to that location on the map. Each location can only have one permenant feature.
 
-You don't need to know anything else to begin playing. Start exploring the forest, and rolling on location tables as you go.
+You don't need to read any further to begin playing. Start exploring the forest, and rolling on location tables as you go.

src/4locations/blighted-forest.txt

@@ -11,7 +11,7 @@ __checkbox(`Giant rat')
 
 __checkbox(`Lost faun trapped in the mud')
 
-__checkbox(`A [grab spider] lies quietly in wait')
+__checkbox(`[Grab Spider]')
 
 __checkbox(`[Double Scorpion]')
 

src/60bestiary/double-scorpion.txt

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 ### Double Scorpion
 
-A large scorpion with two stinging tails, four pincers, and sixteen legs. Technically, there's no proof this isn't just a "scorpion," and that so called "normal" scorpions aren't really "half scorpions".
+A large scorpion with two stinging tails and four claws. Technically, there's no proof this isn't just a "scorpion," and that "normal" scorpions aren't really "half scorpions".
 
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 Mien
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 Double sting
 
-Plagued by thought
+Skittery and jittery
 
 Just looking for a quiet place to molt
 

src/60bestiary/faun.txt

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 ### Faun
 
-Small woodland creatures with wooly goat legs and hooves and small horns. They are short and stocky and tend to be a little rotund. They are raucous, wild, and unpredictable, but are usually mostly just interested in revelry and merry-making.
+Small woodland creatures with wooly goat legs and hooves and small horns. They are short and stocky and tend to be a little rotund. They are wild and unpredictable, but are usually most interested in revelry and merry-making.
 
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src/60bestiary/grab-spider.txt

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 ### Grab Spider
 
-A huge arthropod. Its pedipalps are almost twice as long as its legs, and each ends with a jagged sawtoothed edge. It keeps its palps folded in front of it when not using them. But when hunting, fighting, or defending itself, it unfolds them and is capable of grabbing its prey lightning fast from quite a distance.
+A huge arthropod. Its pedipalps by its mouth are extra elongated, almost twice as long as its legs, and each ends with a jagged sawtoothed edge. It keeps its palps folded in front of it when not using them. But when hunting, fighting, or defending itself, it unfolds them and is capable of grabbing its prey lightning fast from quite a distance.
 
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-Awkwardly molting
+Angry
 
-Hunting
+Hungry
 
 Wanna hug?
 
-Gonna grab yo ass
+Fuck you
 
 Stabby stabby
 
 Just gonna grab ya
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src/60bestiary/honeybear.txt

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 ### Honeybear
 
-The sound of heavy plodding steps accompanied by a loud, muffled buzzing is a sure sign of trouble. The innocuously named Honeybear is a bear, between mostly and all the way dead, that has been animated by a hive of [psycho bees](#psycho-bee). Honeycomb protrudes from its back like sails. Black honey seeps from its pores and leaks from its blind eyes and other orifices. The psycho bees usually steer their shambling, ambulatory bearhives toward the recently or soon-to-be dead so they can make psycho honey from the flesh.
+The sound of heavy plodding steps accompanied by a loud, muffled buzzing is a sure sign of trouble. The innocuously named Honeybear is a bear, between mostly and all the way dead, that has been animated by a hive of [psycho bees](#psycho-bee). Honeycomb protrudes from its back like sails. Black honey seeps from its pores and leaks from its blind eyes and other orifices. The psycho bees usually steer their shambling, ambulatory bearhives toward the recently or soon-to-be dead so they can make psycho honey from the meat.
 
 
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src/60bestiary/monocerus.txt

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 ### Monocerus
 
-A large beast with a single, long, spiraling horn growing from the center of its forehead. It resembles a horse, with a goat's beard and hindquarters.
+A large beast with a single, long, spiraling horn growing from the center of its forehead. It resembles a horse, with a goat's hindquarters and beard.
 
 
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src/60bestiary/mossman.txt

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 ### Mossman
 
-A large shambling plant creature of twisted roots and green flowering vines, thick around as a tree trunk. They blend immediately and effortlessly into the forest: it is possible to be standing right next to one and not know it.
+A large shambling creature of twisted roots and green flowering vines, thick around as a tree trunk. They blend immediately and effortlessly into the forest: it is possible to be standing right next to one and not know it.
 
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src/60bestiary/mosu.txt

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 ### Mosu
 
-A behemoth deer-like creature with massive horns fanning out from its head like cupped hands reaching toward the sky. You could sit comfortably nestled in the cup of one of its upturned horns. It has a bone plate covering most of its face so that it has a skull-like visage.
+A behemoth deer-like creature with massive horns fanning out from its head like cupped hands reaching toward the sky. You could sit comfortably nestled in the cup of one of its upturned horns. It has a long nose and a bulging throat.
 
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src/60bestiary/opulture.txt

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 ### Opulture
 
-One of the more mundane varieties of gryphon, and an unsettling one at that: half opposum, half carion vulture. Bald of head, bald of tail, sharp of beak. It can be found hanging by its tail from tree branches wrapped up in its wings, or perched on tree tops greedily waiting for the doomed to finally die so that they can feast.
+One of the more mundane varieties of gryphon, and an unsettling one at that: half opposum, half carion vulture. Bald of head, bald of tail, sharp of beak. It can be found hanging by its tail from tree branches, or perched on tree tops greedily waiting for the doomed to finally die so that they can feast on it.
 
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src/60bestiary/psycho-bee.txt

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 ### Psycho Bee
 
-These carnivorous bees make thick, black honey from flesh and have a parasitic relationship with the bears of the forest, burrowing into them, hollowing them out, and turning them into walking beehives. The "honeybears" don't survive this, but are piloted by the bees, who take over the nervous system, to find and kill prey for the bees to consume. Eating this "psycho honey" is said to give the victim disturbing visions of dreams and memories of those consumed by the bees.
+These carnivorous bees make thick, black honey from meat and have a parasitic relationship with the bears of the forest, burrowing into them, hollowing them out, and turning them into walking beehives. The "honeybears" don't survive this, but are piloted by the bees, who take over the nervous system, to find and kill prey for the bees to consume. Eating this "psycho honey" is said to give the victim disturbing visions of dreams and memories of those consumed by the bees. Some have reported to be able to cross from the memories of the dead into the landscape of the afterlife.
 
-However, domesticated and rehabilitated psycho bees, kept by the sprites and the fauns of the forest, have successfully been bred to live in beehives instead of bears, and to make honey not from flesh but from the dense meaty kernels of the moonflower. Consuming domesticated psycho honey induces a tranquil state and the sensation of drifting calmly through the void between stars.
+However, domesticated and rehabilitated psycho bees, kept by the sprites and the fauns of the forest, have successfully been bred to live in beehives instead of bears, and to make honey not from meat but from moonflowers. Consuming this more tame variety of psycho honey induces a tranquil state, and the sensation of drifting calmly through the void between stars.
 
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@@ -18,5 +18,5 @@ Eating meat
 
 Aggressive
 
-Territorial
+Protective
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src/60bestiary/sprite.txt

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 ### Sprite
 
-A small winged faerie. Their appearance varies, and their wings, face, and body can resemble a bat, moth, butterfly, or insect. They organize their short lives around ritual and tradition.
+A small winged faerie. Their wings and, to an extent, their general appearance can be bat-like, moth/butterfly-like, or insect-like.
 
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-Fretful
+Playful
 
 Curious
 
-Indignant
+Aggro
 
 Taunting
 
-Condescending
+Haughty
 
 Generous
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